Use samples of unclear sentences and paragraphs from materials provided by the union, local, or area of work before the workshop. With the workshop participants, identify the reader. Ask each participant to edit one or two sentences and present to the whole group.
Here are some sentence examples you may want to use.
Rewrite as if the audience were your local members.
Bill C-66 is the culmination of a process that has taken over two years, directly involved three federal ministers, and consumed countless hours of discussion and consultation. The CLC's involvement in this process has been guided by the insight and experience of representatives of affiliated unions whose activities and membership are, in whole or in part, affected by Part I of the Canada Labour Code.
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The Kader toy factory fire in Thailand, and subsequent fires in Chinese factories, in which many workers, mostly young women, were maimed or lost their lives, dramatically brought home to Canadians that some workers are paying a very high price for the cheap goods we enjoy.
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We have seen the federal government download responsibility for social programs through the Canada Health and Social Transfer, reversing decades' long traditions of universal standards of care across the country. Their rhetoric of local community control and individual consumer choice in health, education, pensions and social security hides the reality that only rich provinces and rich individuals will benefit.
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Because of special disability allowances and specific disability benefits (such as mobility allowances, appliances, home modifications and remedial or special education), the benefits are better than, or less bad than, for welfare recipients generally.
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