Write sentences with no more than one or two clauses to a sentence. Present only one new item of information per sentence.
BEFORE
In response to the Action Plan, the Canadian Labour Congress is working with the Canadian Health Coalition to make the public aware that corporate greed is threatening Medicare, and to build public demand for an end to the monopoly enjoyed by giant drug companies.
AFTER
In response to the Action Plan, the Canadian Labour Congress is working with the Canadian Health Coalition. We are working together to make the public aware that corporate greed is threatening Medicare. We are helping to build public demand for an end to the monopoly enjoyed by giant drug companies.