The title is vague. This may be standard procedure, but it seems to be new information.
The subject line is also vague.
Sentence 1 is too long and confusing, for example: "forbids unlawful harassment."
Paragraph 1 presumes
that the reader has a large
vocabulary.
Paragraph 2 does not
address anyone in
particular. What does
"priority basis" mean?
Paragraph 3 is one, long
sentence.
Paragraph 4 is too "legal"
sounding. Block caps
style is hard to read.
Difficult words
harassment
implied or expressed
intimidating
objectionable expeditious
utmost discretion frank
(honest) disciplinary
Summary
The language is very legal.
ACME SCREW & GEAR LTD. MEMO
Standard Procedure
Subject: Harassment/Sexual Harassment
Acme Screw and Gear has established a strict policy which forbids unlawful harassment of employees, including implied or expressed forms of sexual harassment by any of its employees, managers, customers or suppliers, as detailed in the Ontario Human Rights Code. This includes verbal, written, visual or physical acts that are offensive in nature, intimidating, unwelcome, or that could reasonably be taken as objectionable.
Any employee who feels that he or she has been legitimately subjected to harassment of any type, whether by a coworker, supervisor or visitor of the company should promptly report the incident to the Personnel Manager. The Personnel Manager will investigate on a priority basis in order to resolve or correct the situation in an expeditious manner.
Employees having any questions concerning this policy or its administration should contact the Personnel Manager for a confidential and frank discussion, and employees are assured that the utmost discretion will be used in handling of such matters.
ACME STRONGLY DISAPPROVES OF ANY FORM OF HARASSMENT/SEXUAL HARASSMENT IN THE WORK PLACE, INCLUDING ACTS OF NONEMPLOYEES. DISCIPLINARY ACTION WILL BE TAKEN PROMPTLY AGAINST ANY EMPLOYEE, SUPERVISORY OR OTHERWISE, ENGAGING IN UNLAWFUL HARASSMENT/ SEXUAL HARASSMENT.
– Gordon W.E. Nore, Clear Lines: How to Compose and Design Clear Language Documents for the Workplace, Frontier College Press, Toronto, 1997